I began with the idea of an intriguing introduction to my blog, something that would be the best reflection of what my blog really is in under 300 characters (that's the limit for the intro). Then something happened and my intro suddenly had a fairytale setting, a place my husband says I tend to spend a lot of time in. I would resent that remark, if it weren't so true. So I figured the intro would be appropriate. My blog is supposed to lead my readers... ok, reader... into my mind and the random thoughts that reside therein, and since my mind is usually in lala land, that would be a great setting.
My original intro was very similar to the one below... I didn't realize it went over the character limit and although it remained on the blogpage for a little while, my intro reverted to the original two lines I'd posted and I lost all but what I could recall of it from memory. The new intro has the same premise as this one, but fares lesser chances of deletion because it fits the character limit. Here's the original:
The breeze whispered something, causing the wind chime to tinkle a chuckle.
She turned her head to look up, curious of what had transpired, when a hundred glistening beads rolled off her head... some like crystal clear gems, others still rough but with the twinkle of a hidden jewel inside... sliding down her long flowing hair, falling to the ground with the music of fresh summer rain.
The breeze gasped.
The wind chime froze.
“That feels better” she said, feeling much lighter now, light enough to even fly, she thought. She knelt on her knees and began to gather the fallen beads into her dress.
“My, what a treasure you have!” exclaimed the wind chime finally.
She paused and thought for a moment, then grabbed a handful of beads in the cups of her palms and raised them up to the wind chime.
“You may have some of my treasure,” she told the wind chime, “and take some for your friends.”
2 comments:
Assalam U Alaikum
How is your father doing now...?
What was your brother's wedding like?
Did not see any updates on your homepage or here...
Do write.
And hey! Thanks for taking the suggestion. You oughta work on this story more.
I'm going to return to work on our poor neglected homepage, and I'll have details on it soon. But to give you a quick update, Abbu is doing well, Alhamdulilla, and has returned to work, and Bhaijaan's wedding was hectic but wonderful, except for the part that Abbu and the kids weren't there to enjoy it.
As for the story here, more will come as it rolls off of my head... ;)
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